tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post7072243901686181513..comments2023-09-30T12:20:13.362-04:00Comments on YA Fusion: Editing with Margie LawsonKatie McGarryhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03484414661125386052noreply@blogger.comBlogger38125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-80030184154521056672011-09-26T11:45:36.270-04:002011-09-26T11:45:36.270-04:00Lara, love love your writing! I feel like I'm ...Lara, love love your writing! I feel like I'm in your POV character's skin. Every scene is NYT. :)<br /><br />Hi Margie! You and your courses rock! <br /><br />I took Margie's online class, Empowering Character Emotions. Believe me, it's top notch. Now I'm working through two additional lecture packets - Deep Editing and Writing Body Language. Both courses top notch. <br /><br />If you haven't checked out Margie's courses yet - DO IT! You won't be sorry. With work and dedication, all your scenes can be NYT!Cindy Elliottnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-60587787399769065182011-09-23T18:47:13.989-04:002011-09-23T18:47:13.989-04:00Hi Lara, Hi Margie ~waves~
I love reading about w...Hi Lara, Hi Margie ~waves~<br /><br />I love reading about what others have found in these two fabulous excerpts. What I noticed was the power in the paragraphing. I'm all into that right now (right, Margie?) so I can't help but notice how the second bit LOOKS on the page. This nose issue is front and center to this character and this WHAM moment where she sees the guy of her dreams staring at her nose was powerful not only because she used Litotes (NOTs) but they were each their own SAPS. It's a visual O.M.G. in this ultra-approachable YA. Love it, Lara. Great job!L.A. Mitchellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11729129827211991040noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-11118772606819958262011-09-23T17:11:01.641-04:002011-09-23T17:11:01.641-04:00Hi Margie. Great dissection--as usual. Gloria alre...Hi Margie. Great dissection--as usual. Gloria already mentioned a whole bunch of stuff, so I'm going to try to go beyond her list.<br /><br />The anaphora in the Not, Not, Not sequence is also amplifying what IS true by showing what it is NOT. Then when she hits home with "On my nose" I'm wiggling in my seat hoping against hope that for some insane reason he actually LIKES it.<br /><br />Visceral response "fire burns its way up my cheeks"<br /><br />Power words: stuck, hard, stops, killer, dead center.<br /><br />These power words then juxtaposed with the following power words which build to a great backloading: appreciate, tolerate, blasted, FLAW.<br /><br />Pure genius writing, IMO. Is there a way I can channel that? Do you think Lara would mind if I suck a bit of her writing brain into mine? :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-64268790634537438812011-09-22T13:13:27.392-04:002011-09-22T13:13:27.392-04:00Hi Margie. I'm not a student but would love to...Hi Margie. I'm not a student but would love to take one of your classes some day! <br /><br />I am taking a class with your daughter in October. I'll be interested to see what it entails - I'm sure she's learned a lot from mom!<br /><br />outredgeous at gmail dot comAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15413266993411568037noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-67289044716252360752011-09-21T23:29:05.076-04:002011-09-21T23:29:05.076-04:00Angela --
Loved your review of Flawless. Glad Lar...Angela --<br /><br />Loved your review of Flawless. Glad Lara hooked you. :-)<br /><br />Since I know you, and your cool humor, I bet you're YA voice would be as inimitable as it would be compelling. <br /><br />Thank you for dropping by YA Fusion!Margie Lawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17012407353947831199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-8655378518921346362011-09-21T19:35:27.144-04:002011-09-21T19:35:27.144-04:00Hi Margie! *frenzied waving* ;)
I was excited to ...Hi Margie! *frenzied waving* ;)<br /><br />I was excited to see you dissecting a YA piece today! I've been gravitating more toward YA in both YA fiction and sci-fi in my writing as of late, and it's good to have a taste of some quality work.<br /><br />Lara's voice captured my attention immediately. The snappy pacing and wry sense of humor are almost instantly endearing. And her main character isn't a pushover to subtle emotional abuse, either. Refreshing! <br /><br />I also loved the sad irony of the "special" plate and the 'but not special enough' message of the accompanying pamphlet. That got an audible groan out of me. Any reaction you can elicit that extends beyond my mind is a great indicator of skill (and not just of the questionable condition of my mental faculties.) ;D<br /><br />~Angela BlountAngela N. Blount (RedPeril)https://www.blogger.com/profile/06701198374117476532noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-23838407848673281302011-09-21T12:53:27.431-04:002011-09-21T12:53:27.431-04:00Colette -
Thank you! If you have any questions ab...Colette -<br /><br />Thank you! If you have any questions about my courses, lecture packets, Immersion Master Classes, whatever, please ask!<br /><br />margie @ margielawson . com<br /><br />I bet you'll love FLAWLESS!Margie Lawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17012407353947831199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-62186100621404462622011-09-21T12:51:04.954-04:002011-09-21T12:51:04.954-04:00Carole --
Strong analysis! Since you're an Im...Carole --<br /><br />Strong analysis! Since you're an Immersion Master Class grad, I expect the best deep editing analyses, and you always deliver. <br /><br />Cliche alert!<br /><br />No one would know English is not your first language. <br /><br />Thanks for sharing your brain. :-)Margie Lawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17012407353947831199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-24400608298242649522011-09-21T12:32:56.502-04:002011-09-21T12:32:56.502-04:00Great post, Lisa! Great examples, Margie--I can...Great post, Lisa! Great examples, Margie--I can't wait to check out your website and read FLAWLESS!Colette Ballardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11883069918152729422noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-63986629555884733512011-09-21T12:31:22.279-04:002011-09-21T12:31:22.279-04:00Great post, Lisa! Great examples, Margie--I can...Great post, Lisa! Great examples, Margie--I can't wait to check out your website and read FLAWLESS!Colette Ballardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11883069918152729422noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-89636410945700827992011-09-21T10:39:41.866-04:002011-09-21T10:39:41.866-04:00Hi Margie! Lara received many high grades on thos...Hi Margie! Lara received many high grades on those excerpt:<br /><br />First, I love her new character's name, Rockford Conway. A name is important, it gives a clue to the reader of who that character is. In this case, I feel Rockford Conway will be a bad ass with a smooth inside.<br /><br />Cliché Twist (Between Rock and a hard place)<br /><br />Anaphora (Not my, Not my, Not even...)<br /><br />The last 3 paragraphs are backloaded (nose, rhinoplasty, gignormous flaw.)<br /><br />Good job, Lara!Carole St-Laurenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10941223844222435796noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-42345772988475416672011-09-20T21:20:59.653-04:002011-09-20T21:20:59.653-04:00Hello Deleyna --
Reading the examples from FLAWLE...Hello Deleyna --<br /><br />Reading the examples from FLAWLESS, it would be tough to not want to read the whole book. ;-)<br /><br />Thank you for chiming in!Margie Lawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17012407353947831199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-86704989602584805402011-09-20T21:19:34.155-04:002011-09-20T21:19:34.155-04:00Hello Stina!
Kudos to you for reviewing three lec...Hello Stina!<br /><br />Kudos to you for reviewing three lecture packets from my courses. I load my courses with new concepts and tons of examples and explanations. <br /><br />Deep Editing has 390 pages of lectures. You've given your brain a strong workout. :-)<br /><br />STINA WROTE:<br /><br />Warning: some authors' books will seem dull after you've finished reading Margie's stuff. <br /><br />Based on that comment, I'm confident you've learned how to empower your writing. <br /><br />Some books have amazing stories, but they may not be presented on the page in the most compelling ways. <br /><br />I trust that your books will have stellar stories and stellar writing craft. ;-)Margie Lawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17012407353947831199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-17278749625512968712011-09-20T21:13:34.733-04:002011-09-20T21:13:34.733-04:00Kelly --
Feeding twins? Sounds like your life is ...Kelly --<br /><br />Feeding twins? Sounds like your life is always full. Hopefully it's loaded with lots of fun, not just lots of laundry.<br /><br />If you have any questions about what anything you see on my web site, please feel free to email me. <br /><br />margie @ margielawson . com<br /><br />Thanks!Margie Lawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17012407353947831199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-27976520333901532592011-09-20T21:10:49.086-04:002011-09-20T21:10:49.086-04:00Lisa --
Ahh . . . Love that example.
The imager...Lisa --<br /><br />Ahh . . . Love that example. <br /><br />The imagery and the content are so strong. <br /><br />Reading it make me feel as though my blood had been secreted out of me and replaced with tar. <br /><br />That's powerful writing!<br /><br />Thank you again for inviting me to be your guest on YA Fusion. I enjoyed reading about all the YA Fusion'ers. Great group!Margie Lawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17012407353947831199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-41395575737685955512011-09-20T13:54:43.717-04:002011-09-20T13:54:43.717-04:00Hi, Margie! Great examples. Now I have another boo...Hi, Margie! Great examples. Now I have another book to read!Deleynahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09105974331589879546noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-888339824906675582011-09-20T07:29:01.793-04:002011-09-20T07:29:01.793-04:00I'm finishing off today the third package from...I'm finishing off today the third package from Margie. I highly recommend her courses. You'll see a huge improvement in your writing if you take them. <br /><br />Warning: some authors' books will seem dull after you've finished reading Margie's stuff. I'm reading one YA bestseller's book, and his stuff seems completely devoid of emotion.Stinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11415189347501942340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-47472177944445378812011-09-19T23:45:44.902-04:002011-09-19T23:45:44.902-04:00Hello Jammie Girl --
Ah -- You'll love FLAWLE...Hello Jammie Girl --<br /><br />Ah -- You'll love FLAWLESS!<br /><br />Have fun completing the Empowering Characters' Emotions lecture packet. More Deep Editing ahead. <br /><br />Gee, that read like, Dangerous Curves Ahead. :-))Margie Lawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17012407353947831199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-60642813255226207172011-09-19T23:33:09.181-04:002011-09-19T23:33:09.181-04:00Kimberle --
Ah -- a book that you and your daught...Kimberle --<br /><br />Ah -- a book that you and your daughter both loved. Very cool.<br /><br />I'd love to have a pic of you and your daughter holding FLAWLESS. :-)<br /><br />I bet you and your daughter will love Katie McGarry's August 2012, release, PUSHING THE LIMITS, too.Margie Lawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17012407353947831199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-62359879711147680142011-09-19T23:29:01.302-04:002011-09-19T23:29:01.302-04:00Sherry --
Love your toe-to-toe do-si-do. Fabulous...Sherry --<br /><br />Love your toe-to-toe do-si-do. Fabulous content and cadence. <br /><br />Just what I'd expect from a multi-Immersion grad. :-)<br /><br />Thanks for visiting YA Fusion!Margie Lawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17012407353947831199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-32770142194634865512011-09-19T23:24:29.221-04:002011-09-19T23:24:29.221-04:00Hello Blue Eye --
Glad you enjoyed my blog!
Than...Hello Blue Eye --<br /><br />Glad you enjoyed my blog!<br /><br />Thanks for chiming in.Margie Lawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17012407353947831199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-69841208223694652382011-09-19T21:28:21.115-04:002011-09-19T21:28:21.115-04:00It's just before feeding time for the twins so...It's just before feeding time for the twins so I won't post an excerpt. But I want to say your analysis makes for very interesting reading. Heading to your website now to have a browse.<br /><br />Thank you!<br /><br />Kelly EthanKelly Ethanhttp://www.kellyethan.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-8385098046111288152011-09-19T17:53:30.674-04:002011-09-19T17:53:30.674-04:00Hi Margie! Huge thanks for sharing with us. I'...Hi Margie! Huge thanks for sharing with us. I'll contribute some fresh writing from Gayle Forman's "Where She Went." <br />"When the lights come up after the concert, I feel drained, lugubrious, as though my blood has been secreted out of me and replaced with tar." I love that image.<br /><br />Like Katie, I feel like your classes have lifted my writing several levels. I'm a Margie junkie!<br /><br />Thanks for sharing.Lisa Tapphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02787266653773740495noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-34427649039161723242011-09-19T15:45:30.513-04:002011-09-19T15:45:30.513-04:00Yes, I am hooked! I now have Flawless on my Kindl...Yes, I am hooked! I now have Flawless on my Kindle "download ASAP" list. And the cover is extremely clever - everyone should pull it up after reading this excerpt. I'm not a Margie grad yet, but am working my way through Empowering Characters EmotionsAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12911208285820220733noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8133203161912010188.post-65763988984077640222011-09-19T15:44:38.081-04:002011-09-19T15:44:38.081-04:00Katie --
Congratulations on all your contracts!
...Katie --<br /><br />Congratulations on all your contracts!<br /><br />Thank you for letting me know what you learned in my deep editing courses helped you sell. Yay!<br /><br />Other writers have shared that sentiment. It always gives me a visceral hit. :-)<br /><br />I'm looking forward to featuring you on my Pubbed Margie Grad Blog in August, 2012. But I don't want to wait that long!Margie Lawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17012407353947831199noreply@blogger.com